Talk:Cleo the Killer/@comment-68.112.207.73-20170118230420

This is to much like Jeff the killers story. I suggest when making a creepypasta you dont put other creepypastas in your story or use 'killer' in the name of your character. The ending was like Jeff the killers story, too. I suggest you remake the ending, as to deleting the part when the mom says 'get the gun call the police's. Also, eliminate Jeff from your story, and maybe add more detail and suspense in her killing. If you did that (the name Cleo the killer is fine I guess, but like I said, try not to use the killer in our characters name) this creepypasta could become something big and amazing. And not to be rude, but this story seems a bit rushed. Slow down, and add more cliffhangers,. Making your readers more interested and wanting to keep on reading. Thank you.