Talk:Cleo the Killer/@comment-29963337-20180930011001

Besides the either trollish or just amateur approach overall, there are plenty of issues with this.

The intro describes Cleo in the first person, but the second paragraph onwards suddenly jumps into POV. Which is this? Is it a first-person story, or a third person story? The last "paragraph" jumps into present tense awkwardly, and then just as soon, jumps out. Misused homophones and absent punctuation also affect the quality.